I have some changes to make on a printout of this somewhere - mostly smoothing the prose out, I think. It's not something I work on much, as I enjoy writing short stories more, but maybe I'll finish it one day.
This is one of the first short stories I wrote, and there's lots of room for improvement! It's just as it was written during a writing workshop, with no edits, but I'll rewrite at some point.
This eventually became a song when I joined a band. My friend phoned me up one day and asked if he could put the words to some music he'd just written, which he then played over the phone.
Favourites by Other Writers
I don't have much of my own writing online yet, so here are some of my favourite short stories, and where to find them.
I haven't read any of Ray Bradbury's novels (yet), but he has plenty of outstanding short stories. Stories Volume 1 has 100. I can only remember the titles of 2 of my favourites - The Lake and I, Mars.
Damon Knight wrote great short stories too, and a great book of advice about writing them. Four in One is one of my favourites, which I read in Science Fiction: 101, an anthology compiled by Robert Silverberg, with each story also containing a critique by Silverberg - very useful! Fondly Farenheit by Alfred Bester was another one of my favourites in this book.
Free Online Stories
Beneath Ceaseless Skies and Kraxon are two of my favourite places to read online. The latter is great if you want to read something quickly, as stories are between 950-1050 words. Although most stories on Beneath Ceaseless Skies are free, it wouldn't exist without donations and subscriptions.
The Sword of Loving Kindness Part I & Part II by Chris Willrich
The View from Endless Scarp by Marta Randall
Laws of Survival by Nancy Kress (also in The Mammoth Book of Best New SF 21)